
This is a brilliant suspense story! The tension builds perfectly as Melanie’s paranoia escalates, leading her — and us — down a path of questions about her own mind and safety. The reveal about carbon dioxide poisoning is unexpected yet plausible, adding an eerie layer that’s grounded in reality. Ron’s concern and eventual support provide a warm, stabilizing influence, which rounds out the story beautifully.
Your use of sensory details, like the smell of burning toast or the creak of an old apartment, really pulls readers into Melanie’s deteriorating world. The way you weave in her fascination with true crime as a potential factor in her confusion is a clever touch, and the notes turning out to be her own under the effects of CO2 deprivation is the perfect twist.
The additional story teaser at the end for Trent’s story is intriguing too! It would draw readers into another layer of mystery. This story really nails the suspense while maintaining a sympathetic, relatable protagonist.
Graduation: A Celebration for All

Imagine the excitement of graduating college and having Jerry Seinfeld as your commencement speaker. For most Duke graduates, it was an incredible moment. However, some chose to walk out during his address simply because he is a Jewish comedian. This protest was ironic, as they missed a unique opportunity to hear from a famous actor critical of left-wing, politically correct nonsense.
The majority of students cheered for Seinfeld. Walking out on such an event was seen by many as silly and disrespectful. Even if you don’t find him funny, it’s important to respect your college and fellow graduates. Graduation is a celebration for everyone, not just a small group of protesters.
By walking out, the protesters not only ruined their own experience but also disrupted the ceremony for others. All because they didn’t like the speaker? After years of hard work, the least they could do is stay for an hour and contribute to making the ceremony special for everyone.
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